[翻译尝试]接力漫画小剧场：久織-岡田-手代木

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前阵子看的久織-岡田-手代木三位合作的短篇接力漫画。看後感觉挺有意思的。这两天正好空闲加上一时兴起，遂动手试着翻译了下。

说明：日语知识有限，只能粗略看个大概，内容理解还是依赖英文的。所以，译文主要依据英文台词进行意译，日文只是辅助参考。

英译中和日译中会存在差异、自己的翻译措词也不一定正确到位，还请多多包涵有理解或翻译上的错误欢迎指正。

(☆ﾟ∀ﾟ)感谢@jorgegeminis的剧透贴图和全英文本提供~Thank You！（′∀｀*)

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翻译时发现英文台词里有两处与台词原意似乎有出入，标注如下有待确证

P13  修羅的两句台词

シュラ：「……仕上げができンな」

Shura：they will (→won't) provide the finishing touches

シュラ：「やむおえン　俺がやろう」

Shura：I do not have a choice, he'll (→I'll) have to take care of it.

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↓↓↓↓↓Enjoy^^↓↓↓↓↓↓

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P01

修羅：雖說突然，我就是。。。

修羅：。。。這次接力漫畫的負責人

（哒 哒 哒）

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（突 然 說 什 麼 吶!？）

天馬：啊！你在說什麼！！

翔子：就是！內容不是該有我們三個共同決定嗎！！

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修羅：本來是該這樣

修羅：（哼）

修羅：大家都忙的不可開交，不可能一起分擔

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修羅：所以，內容就由我來全權負責

天馬：（混蛋）開什麼玩笑！？

翔子：快叫領導出來！

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修羅：不要吵！就這樣敲定了。然後——

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P02

修羅：畫稿的潤飾加工交由翔子來做

翔子：（抽 到 下 下 簽！！）

天馬：得救了❤

翔子：爲什麼！這太不公平了！

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修羅：本人不想做。天馬的情況“彼此彼此”（註）。最終只有靠翔子妳了，妳是板繪。

天馬：（彼此彼此^^從沒像現在這樣覺得開心）

翔子：（慢 着！！）這種說法完全不能接受！

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修羅：毋須多言，這是最終決定

天馬：等...等一下

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天馬：怎麼覺得。。。

天馬：。。。你的角色少的有點可疑？！

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天馬：漫畫是你負責的，畫面上卻幾乎看不見你的形象

（這種構圖分配不覺得奇怪嗎！？）

翔子：真的！

修羅：關於這點——

（註：英譯similar，日文原詞アナログ "analog" ，漫畫TLC以手繪爲主再配合電腦掃圖，而Ep・G和聖鬥少女兩部作品主要爲數碼繪）

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P03

修羅：畫人物畫聖衣是一件費心費力的事

（真 冷 血）

天馬：噢！！簡直豈有此理，虧你說的出口！

翔子：不只臺本，你也得負責參與繪畫！！

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修羅：把我說的話當耳邊風了嗎？

修羅：你們似乎是忘了什麼——

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修羅：青銅→（天馬&翔子）vs（修羅）←黃金

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修羅：記住自己的身份

翔子：（呃。。）真以爲自己在聖域麼！！還上下級！！

（濫 用 權 力）

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天馬：你以爲這種模仿二次元角色的發言（註）。。。

天馬：。。。會被允許？

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修羅：當然——

修羅：允許了

（註：meta-manga，人物角色知道自己在漫畫裏）

P04

修羅：《神輪會》（註1）應該知道的吧

修羅：裏面不就有像是“跌到圈裏”（註2）之類的發言麼

（給 我 適 可 而 止）

翔子：噁心到家！！

翔子：真把自己當作神啊！！

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修羅：再爭論不休，我放棄，漫畫停刊（再 見）

天馬：打算丟下工作不管嗎？！

翔子：這是威脅我們嗎，真的假的？

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天馬：跟不講理的人論理——沒用

（真想揍他一頓！！！）

翔子：是呀。。儘快搞定。。。

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修羅：好吧。。。如果是這樣的話想要你們現在就做件事

修羅：這種場合。。嗯。。。

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天馬：幹嘛！？

修羅：沒什麼太難的。。。

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（註1：《実录！神輪會》，車田正美的一部寫實漫畫，侃味自己的工作室及自己的漫畫作品。於1979 - 1983年間不定期載於集英社週刊《少年Jump》）

（註2：車田正美的漫畫《熱拳本色》又名《拳王創世紀》名字惡搞，Ring ni Kakero → Ring ni Kokero）

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P05

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修羅：倆人認真較量一下

天馬&翔子：哈！？

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修羅：當作一場夢之賽，秀一秀，不覺得帥氣有型麼？

翔子：什麼夢之賽呀！！你是笨蛋麼？！

天馬：那你準備幹什麼？

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修羅：我嗎？我就。。。

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修羅：。。。旁觀

天馬：你就沒打算參與進來！

翔子：可恥！太可耻啦！

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天馬：還有！！

天馬：我不想動手打女人!

翔子：（驚）啊？！

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P06

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翔子：你什麼意思？想說我不配當你對手？

修羅：呵~開始較真了

天馬：（等下）我不是這個意思！

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天馬：是我措辭不當

翔子：我現在很想較量一番。。。

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修羅：既然你躍躍欲試，一切好辦

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修羅：跨頁戰鬥圖靠妳潤飾加工了，儘可能表現的華麗

天馬：（再次得救❤）

翔子：你別趁亂敲竹槓！！！

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P07

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修羅：可是，這也正是妳感興趣的事吧？

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修羅：漂亮地擊敗天馬，更襯托出自己的實力

翔子：。。。有道理。。。

天馬：翔子！別被他花言巧語騙了！保持自我！

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翔子：別老碎碎念！是聖鬥士的話就戰鬥吧！！

修羅：對~戰鬥

天馬：聖鬥士同伴之間不允許私鬥！！

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（聖鬥士不得因個人理由私下決鬥！！！）

翔子：（驚）

翔子：。。。

修羅：。。。

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P08

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修羅：那就靈活應對嘛

翔子：就是，頑鈍傢伙的發言一概沒聽見。。。白癡！！

（解除禁令）

天馬：我跟妳講大實話，妳卻把我當傻瓜！！不講理！

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翔子：啊。。。但是真要戰鬥的話，潤飾畫稿就辛苦了

翔子：確切來講太苦逼！！

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修羅：別擔心，翔子

翔子：嗯？

修羅：妳無需勞心任何事——

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翔子：這是爲什麼！我擔心吶！

修羅：爲什麼嗎？

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修羅：因爲辛苦的人不是妳

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P09

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修羅：而是那個“代理”妳的人（註）

翔子：（領 會）

翔子：原來如此，跟我沒關係啊

天馬：她把自己捲進了麻煩還渾然不覺

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翔子：不想聽你嘰歪

天馬：（遭 受 打 擊）

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天馬：都被妳說到這份上了。。。

天馬：。。。繼續沉默非好漢！！！

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翔子：（唷）你終於有鬥志了嗎？

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（威 脅）

天馬：是啊！！！別以爲。。。

天馬：。。。我會退縮哦！！！

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（註：爲虛構人物作畫的畫家）

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P10-11

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天馬&翔子：燃燒吧。。。

天馬&翔子：。。。我的小宇宙！！

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修羅：橫跨兩頁。。。

修羅：。。。的大場面。。不好意思。。我來描繪一下。。。

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天馬&翔子：流星拳！！

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P12

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天馬：呃...果然。。

天馬：妳很強

翔子：你...你也一樣啊。。

KO！！（噗咚）

修羅：打平手麼？

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P13

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修羅：因爲倆人都倒下了，沒法收尾了

（合上）

修羅：沒有辦法，只能由我來

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天馬：別想些有的沒的。。。真是夠了。。。

翔子：真要這樣把你也打趴了

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修羅：不可能

天馬：（不會讓你開溜的）

天馬：覺得我們贏不了黃金聖鬥士？

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翔子：那就讓你看看化不可能爲可能的奇蹟吧！！

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修羅：但是正如我說的。。。

修羅：不可能

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P14

修羅：這是最後一頁

天馬：（他逃走了麼？！）

翔子：就這樣完了？（E N D）

修羅：還有，我得去向雅典娜報告你們私鬥的事

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雅典娜：阿。。阿嚏

雅典娜：感冒了嗎。。。

雅典娜：（討厭吶。。。）

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最后附上jorgegeminis提供的英文文本

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P01

Shura: I know it's sudden, but it is I whowill ...

Shura ... be the leader for this commonmanga project.

* Ta ta ta! *

Tenma: Huh? But what are you talking aboutyou?

Tenma: * Direct, out of nowhere *!

Shoko: That's right. Yet it was expected wedecide together the content, right?

Shura: Yes, that is what was intended.

Shura: * * Hmpf

Shura: But everyone is very busy, it willnot happen at all to share.

Shura: And so it is I who'll take care ofthe entire contents.

Tenma: * * Idiots!

Tenma: Hey! What is this crap?

Shoko: Bring your leaders!

Shura: Calm. It's decided, and it will notchange. And then ...

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P02

Shura: The finishing of the work will bedone on the side of Shoko.

Shoko: * I actually gets the worst !! *

Tenma: Saved!

Shoko: Why? This is completely unfair!

Shura: I do not want to take care of thefinishes. And in Tenma is rather "similar." And that's why it finallyShoko upon thee, thou that is digital.

Shoko * Minute !! *

Shoko: I do not accept that!

Tenma: (I have never been so happy today tobe "similar".)

Shura: No need to protest, I told you itwas final.

Tenma: Hey, a moment ...

Tenma: I find that in fact ...

Tenma: ... we see you strangely little.

Tenma: You are responsible for theproduction, but we hardly see you on the images.

Tenma: * This is a bit odd as distribution*?

Shoko: It's true!

Shura: Yes ... in fact ...

(Ndt: "analog", so TLC especiallyhandmade paper and scanned, unlike G and Sh? that are largely made on computer/ tablet)

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P03

Shura: It's that draw me or my Clothrequires a lot of work, right?

Tenma: * * What cruelty!

Tenma: Hey ho! You admit it openly!

Shoko: You're not just in charge of thescript, you have also the responsibility to participate in the drawings, right?

Shura: Are you so deaf?

Shura: Looks like you forgot something.

Shura: Gold.

Shura: Bronze.

Shura: Keep in mind your status.

Shoko T dare you serve you in the Sanctuaryof the hierarchy?

Shoko * * Abuse of power!

Tenma: And you think that this kind ofmeta-manga ...

Tenma: ... will be allowed?

Shura: Sure ...

Shura: ... it will be allowed.

(Ndt: "meta-manga" manga in whichcharacters know they are in a manga)

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P04

Shura: If we consider it as the circle ofthe gods of the Heisei Era, it will be allowed, like Ring or Kokero, you knowcertainly.

Tenma: * Enough *!

Shoko: That's really low! How dare you !!

Shoko: * * Kiih!

Shoko: Did you intend to include you ingods?

Shura: If you complain at this point, it isbetter that I give up and stopped the manga?

Shura: * * Not true?

Tenma: Do you plan to drop your work?

Shoko: You threaten us like this, casually?

Tenma: It's no use. We can not reason withsomeone so nonsense.

Tenma: * I want to beat him up !!! *

Shoko: Yes, get it over with as quickly aspossible ...

Shura: Well ... in that case be aware thatthere is something I would like you now.

Shura: This kind of scenario, huh ...

Tenma: What ... what?

Shura: Oh, nothing too difficult.

(ndt "circle of the gods of the HeiseiEra", the "circle of the gods" is an obscure manga Kurumada (releasedin the Showa Era, which preceded the heisei AD) that contains jokes about hisstudio plus his manga. "Ring or Kokero" ('stumbles into the ring') isa parody of Ring ni Kakero (give everything in the ring).

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P05

Shura: Confront you seriously.

Tenma, Shoko: How?

Shura: It'll be a dream match, somethingcool to show, do not you think?

Shoko: What the delirium of dream match?Are not you a little silly?

Tenma: But what are you planning to do?

Shura: Me? I'm going to ...

Shura ... watching you.

Tenma: You really do not have the intentionto get involved, right?

Shoko: Shame on you! Shame on you!

Tenma: And more ...

Tenma: ... I will not lay a hand on awoman!

Shoko: * shock *

Shoko: What?

Shoko * grrr *

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P06

Shoko: What's that? You implying that I'mnot a suitable opponent for you?

Shura: Oh, there is thunder in the air ...

Tenma: No! This is not what I meant!

Tenma: Minute!

Tenma: * * Kiih

Tenma: I chose my words poorly, that's it!

Shoko: Yes, now I really want to knock ...

Shura: If you feel as motivated, everythingwill be fine.

Shura: Débrouille yourself to polish up aspread during your fight. Something that eyeful.

Tenma: (This is the second time today thatI avoid a chore ?)

Shoko: Take advantage of the confusion tonot abuse it!

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P07

Shura: But is it not after all in your owninterest?

Shura: Smite Tenma in a beautiful fight,this will put your value by force.

Shoko: ... it's not wrong ...

Tenma: Shoko! He manipulates you with hissweet words! Get a grip!

Shoko: You're sorry to complain all thetime! Bats in if you are a Saint!

Shura: Yes, fight.

Tenma: The Saints do not have the right tofight among comrades, no !!

* Shock *

* The Saints do not have the right to fightfor their personal interests !!!!!! *

* Banned *

Shoko ...

Shura ...

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P08

Shura: We will show flexibility for thisone.

Shoko: Yes, I have heard nothing of yourpainful menstruation, moron!

* Enable *

Tenma: I told you yet what is right, andyou treat me like an idiot? It's not going home !!

Shoko: Aah ... but if we fight finisheswill be quite painful ...

Shoko: To put things clearly, it makes mesweat!

Shura: Do not worry, Shoko.

Shoko: Huh?

Shura: You do not have any trouble to you.

Shoko: Why? Of course I do, I'm worried!

Shura: Why?

Shura: It's not for you it will bedifficult.

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P09

Shura: It will be rather for the person whois in you.

Shoko: * I agree *

Shoko: Yes you're right, it does notconcern me ...

Tenma: * It does not realize that she getsherself in trouble?

Shoko: Stop whining, it's really painful!

Tenma: * Frustration *!

Tenma: Grr!

Tenma: You think I'm nice to the point ...

Tenma: ... not to react after I took allthis in the head?

* Phew *

Shoko: That's it, you're finally motivatedto fight?

Tenma: Yeah, and not think ...

Tenma: ... that I will reverse now!

* Threatening *

(ndt "for the person who is inyou." Expression that means in the case of a fictional character or hisseiyuu that draws the mangaka.)

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P10-11

Tenma, Shoko: Now burns ...

Tenma, Shoko ... my Cosmos !!

Shura: A double page ...

Shura: A large image ... good as I feelsorry for them I will draw ...

Tenma, Shoko: Ryusei Ken !!

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P12

Tenma: Guh!

Shoko: Uuh!

Tenma: Kuh ... I expected no less ...

Tenma: You are strong ...

Shoko: You ...

Shoko: You too ...

KO !!

* Bam *

Shura: Hmm, a double KO？

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P13

Shura: Because they are both collapsed,they will provide the finishing touches.

Shura: I do not have a choice, he'll haveto take care of it.

Tenma: You do not do that at your head ...that's enough!

Shoko: We will also put you down if it's like that!

Shura: It's impossible.

Tenma: * We will not let you slip *!

Tenma: Do you think we are not able todefeat a Gold, right？

Shoko: Yes you'll see, we'll show you amiracle, we will make the impossible possible!

Shura: But as I told you ...

Shura: That's impossible.

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P14

Shura: This is the last page.

Tenma: * * He fled?

Shoko: That's ... that's it?

Shura: And then I have to go report toAthena that you fought for personal reasons.

Athena: A ... atchoum!

Athena: I caught a cold?

Athena* Oh no, not that *

水叶

哇！感谢翻译！～

phy

樓主,十分感謝!

希望將來有機會在單行本中見到

exmx

赞！

watermelon

phy 发表于 2015-5-6 23:56
樓主,十分感謝!

希望將來有機會在單行本中見到

謝謝支持！

單行本裏應該見不到了，這是展會上的限量非賣品冊子 只有300冊紀念Ep.G 第1卷、聖鬥士翔子 第3卷、冥王外伝 第11卷 同時發售的小禮品。

空桑寂

翻译辛苦了。楼主大大能不能转载你的翻译到百度贴吧？

watermelon

空桑寂 发表于 2015-5-7 18:38
翻译辛苦了。楼主大大能不能转载你的翻译到百度贴吧？

可以啊^^，记得注明出处，把前面的说明保留。

空桑寂

好的，谢谢

勇者罗兰

之前的联动短篇原来是这样，谢谢翻译了-0-

希绪弗斯1215

这个第一次看到，没看过其他两篇，决定去看一下

2248629354

没耐心看下去了，好像是两个男人欺负一个女的

watermelon

2248629354 发表于 2015-8-4 18:08
没耐心看下去了，好像是两个男人欺负一个女的

这短篇漫其实是在讲三次元的三位画师互动的事、跟漫画的剧情无关

=====剧中模式=====
黄金：修罗（负责）打太极（偷懒）+向女神打小报告
青铜：翔子（劳力主役）+天马（劳力2号）
女神：我打酱油^^

修罗负责人（岡田）嫌绘画麻烦（偷懒），考虑到天马（手代木）手绘漫画很苦逼，于是把差事推给会数码绘的翔子（久織）
翔子年轻热血，被修罗三（煽）言（风）两（点）语（火）无厘头地跟天马杠上了，等两人决定统一战线“应战”修罗，小剧场也差不多结束了。。。修罗就这么一路忽悠、坐享其成、最后还不忘向女神打小报告

结论：青铜果然不是黄金的对手→修罗其实是腹黑属性←翔子容易被煽动（都是热血的错）、天马无厘头地夹在了当中

P.S. 三位不同绘画风格放一起竟然很和谐

longgu

好欢乐 感谢翻译~

meiyubaoye

各种不同的版本人物乱入。翻译辛苦了呢。很搞笑的说

蔷薇飞雪

修罗居然比皇后还腹黑。。。。。。这么高智商还被撒加利用，咱家真是醉了==|||||

watermelon

蔷薇飞雪 发表于 2015-8-28 13:38
修罗居然比皇后还腹黑。。。。。。这么高智商还被撒加利用，咱家真是醉了==|||||

哈哈`(*∩_∩*)′其实这篇小剧场是在讲三位漫画家之间的互动，跟二次元的漫画人物没有直接关联。
就这样理解吧：修罗是冈田、天马是手代木、翔子是久织